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We are a year 5/6 (9-10 year olds) class from Bairds Mainfreight Primary School in Auckland, NZ.

You can see some of our learning that took place in Room 12 in 2010 and 2011.

NB: I have moved to a new school now so this blog is no longer active. You are still welcome to comment and look at the great fun we had over the past two years.

Thank you for all the lovely comments :)
Tara T-J
Contact : (@taratj on Twitter)

Tuesday, August 17, 2010

Things could be worse

A shared story by Room 12

CRUNCH! I looked down and saw, to my horror, an abundant amount of tinsy winsy little spiraled cracked shells. They looked like a mozaic, but this was not art.

The little shells were moving in a pool of slimy goo. It looked like the inside of caramello chocolate but it was way more slimy and disgusting. The blood was melting down and spreading across the wet concrete.

I looked at my new white shiny hi-topped Nikes. There was slippery slime all over them. I felt sad and angry. Stupid snail, how dare you get in my way and ruin my new shoes.

But then I realized, the snail was far more worse off than me. The snail was DEAD. I started to think about the snail's family...

What if the snail was a kid? would its Mum and Dad be worried about it?

What if the snail was a mother? The babies would have no mother or food (unless they found their uncle or auntie).

What if the snail was about to get married? Would there be a confused snail wife wondering where her fiance was and what she had done wrong?

Suddenly I thought, I don't really care about my brand new shiny shoes. There are far more other people worse off!

1 comment:

  1. I love how you guys are using shared writing to develop your writing skills. I also really like the similes and metaphors you have used... Your questions have really got me thinking and I love the reminder - no matter how bad my day is.... someone out there is worse off...

    Meanwhile - this is my third attempt at leaving a comment... Why is it so hard, I wonder?

    The Scoopers will keep reading your writing - it is great!

    Ms Bee -