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We are a year 5/6 (9-10 year olds) class from Bairds Mainfreight Primary School in Auckland, NZ.

You can see some of our learning that took place in Room 12 in 2010 and 2011.

NB: I have moved to a new school now so this blog is no longer active. You are still welcome to comment and look at the great fun we had over the past two years.

Thank you for all the lovely comments :)
Tara T-J
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Sunday, August 15, 2010

Jayden's personal writing

My First Cut

By Jayden

Crash! Sling slice flop, aaahaaaah, blood racing down my leg like hungry gazelles reaching the tip of my toes. Everyone rushing down the stairs trying to see what happened. Blood spreading everywhere. It was like a blood pool. You could see the inside of my leg. My cousin laughing at me. My skin stuck on the carpet. All the pain and blood.

Round and round and round the bandage goes. I tip-toed up the stairs. Scrubber scrubber, scrubber everyone trying to get the blood stain off the carpet. Bounding, bending, blood spreading everywhere.

I could feel the cold blood surrounding me and whispering to me. The cold blood pool was like the water in Antarctica

1 comment:

  1. Jayden what a beautiful piece of writing. I can close my eyes and see clearly the pictures of what happened in my head-because you have used such great description and imagery. well done!
    Miss M xo