My First Cut
By Jayden
Crash! Sling slice flop, aaahaaaah, blood racing down my leg like hungry gazelles reaching the tip of my toes. Everyone rushing down the stairs trying to see what happened. Blood spreading everywhere. It was like a blood pool. You could see the inside of my leg. My cousin laughing at me. My skin stuck on the carpet. All the pain and blood.
Round and round and round the bandage goes. I tip-toed up the stairs. Scrubber scrubber, scrubber everyone trying to get the blood stain off the carpet. Bounding, bending, blood spreading everywhere.
I could feel the cold blood surrounding me and whispering to me. The cold blood pool was like the water in
Jayden what a beautiful piece of writing. I can close my eyes and see clearly the pictures of what happened in my head-because you have used such great description and imagery. well done!
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